Bracing himself against the torrent of icy wind that rushed towards him down the narrow pass, the lone figure prepared himself for the challenge ahead. I feel snow running down my vines. Crack boom crush, the rocky terrain leaps over the smooth ice cold frigid snow. I throw the rock up in the dark blue sky. The step feels old and rusty, I hurry out of this enchanted place.
Wow, Aundreah. Your writing is very descriptive. I like how you have used onomatopoeia (crack, boom) in your writing. It helps to describe your ideas. I also like how you are using wow words (terrain, leaps, frigid, enchanted). I can really get a sense that I am standing there looking at what you are describing. Where did you go to get away from the enchanted place?
ReplyDeleteI love the descriptive words you have used in this. That image is beautifully evocative.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Paul. Thank for the comment. I really like how you added in your comment descriptive words . what have writing during Lock down ? BLOG YOU LATER. DRE
DeleteAwesome piece of writing, Aundreah, some beautiful descriptive vocabulary going on here. I wonder what's beyond the top of those stairs...?
ReplyDeleteAundreah your writing is a great example that a piece doesn't need to be long...using interesting words like you have really makes you feel like you know the place, and could even be at this enchanted area.
ReplyDeleteGreat work!!
Kia ora, Aundreah. This is a very descriptive piece of writing, well done! You have managed to portray to your audience the feeling within the image very well. I especially liked the wow words terrain, frigid and enchanted that you used. I wold love to know where is this lone figure heading?
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Sarah . thank you for the comment. I really liked how you added in your comment descriptive writing well done . what have you been writing during Lock down ?
DeleteThis is amazing writing. I (Kezia) love it.
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